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Title: A Poem about social conformity
Post by: TheJudge on May 18, 2010, 02:19:49 PM: Something I wrote a while back...

Like a dead fish, I let the current guide me
I float around in a pool of nothingness
Slowly twirling away to oblivion
Loosing myself to the will of the stream

I gasp for air but cannot breath
I try to move but I’m unable too
I’m trapped in a world of illusions
My eyes are open yet I do not see

The guilt is eating me up from inside
Yet I have done nothing wrong
I walk the earth blindly and without purpose
And I have no clue where I’m heading

I’ve lost my place in the world
Because the world took it away from me
But now I know I was at fault
Like a dead fish, I’ve let the current guide me
Title: Re: A Poem about social conformity
Post by: BizB on May 18, 2010, 06:15:46 PM: I like it.
Title: Re: A Poem about social conformity
Post by: TheJudge on May 18, 2010, 07:35:35 PM: I remember getting some feedback from Cat on this one. She didn't like the image of a dead fish. I do. :lol:
Title: Re: A Poem about social conformity
Post by: Wunderkind on May 18, 2010, 08:36:48 PM: I like the image of a dead fish. Most people remind me of dead fish. They stink and their eyes have gone all empty and milky colored.

Also they have 0 free will... they're just kind of... there, belly up and bloated.
Title: Re: A Poem about social conformity
Post by: TheJudge on May 19, 2010, 06:42:18 AM: It's one of those dumbass fishes that keep bumping into the glass.
Title: Re: A Poem about social conformity
Post by: Larstait on January 07, 2011, 11:21:09 PM: I find the piece all too plebeian and uninspired. Dead fish cannot breathe, btw.

Just kidding, I actually rather enjoy the simile of the dead fish. Reminds me of the term "floaters" which a friend and I coined to describe adolescent social conformity.
Title: Re: A Poem about social conformity
Post by: ClintonNoggle on March 03, 2011, 02:33:14 PM: I am my own social circle. I don't care to follow other people and I don't want to be followed.

People need to stop being sheep.

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Title: Re: A Poem about social conformity
Post by: MISTER MASSACRE on March 03, 2011, 02:42:35 PM: Or maybe sheep need to start being people!
Title: Re: A Poem about social conformity
Post by: 12AX7 on March 03, 2011, 03:37:12 PM: Are ewe shear aboot thet ?
Title: Re: A Poem about social conformity
Post by: TheJudge on March 04, 2011, 10:47:02 PM: Quote from: ClintonNoggle on March 03, 2011, 02:33:14 PM
I am my own social circle. I don't care to follow other people and I don't want to be followed.

If that were true, you'd be a social square.