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Title: a poem
Post by: kit on January 18, 2009, 09:43:29 PM
this poem is open to criticism and comments and other stuff... and I know it's kind of bad.
 But, I expect you'll all love it ardently of course  :w:
about the colors...um...yeah. I had fun with them.....


I happened upon far away place
a place I'd never been before
the people there were indeed quite strange
and traveled in packs of four.

Yes, It was a very interesting place
and I couldn't believe what I was seeing
but I was lost and couldn't find my way
so I was stuck there for the time being.

Some people had orange skin,
and eyes that were empty and wide.
Others had multi-colored arms
that grew according to the tide.

Some people had green skin and tails
and were nearly ten feet tall
others had purple skin with scales
but were actually rather small

I saw a robot walking around
with a device that was rather neat,
and a hobo man who had feet instead of hands
and hands instead of feet.

I know my story is very strange
but honestly, it's true
so make sure not to get lost
or else this might happen to you.




Title: Re: a poem
Post by: ivan on January 19, 2009, 12:55:58 PM
this poem

I... I actually enjoyed it!
Title: Re: a poem
Post by: 12AX7 on January 19, 2009, 04:53:46 PM
I... I actually enjoyed it!


  I did too; also the colors made parts of it look sort of 3D-ish. :-D
Title: Re: a poem
Post by: dcrog on January 19, 2009, 06:19:53 PM
  I did too; also the colors made parts of it look sort of 3D-ish. :-D

Me too except for the white letters I had to highlight to find the stanza.
Title: Re: a poem
Post by: ivan on January 19, 2009, 06:45:34 PM
Me too except for the white letters I had to highlight to find the stanza.

Skin problems.
Title: Re: a poem
Post by: dcrog on January 20, 2009, 08:06:18 AM
Skin problems.

I haven't had acne in years.
Title: Re: a poem
Post by: pbsaurus on January 21, 2009, 02:23:17 PM
Psoriasis?
Title: Re: a poem
Post by: dcrog on January 21, 2009, 04:34:13 PM
Not me.  Maybe ivan.
Title: Re: a poem
Post by: ivan on January 21, 2009, 04:38:52 PM
No, thanks, I'm full.
Title: Re: a poem
Post by: xolik on January 22, 2009, 12:57:12 PM
I like your face
I like your ass
Let's get together
After class.
Title: Re: a poem
Post by: HeavyJay on January 22, 2009, 01:36:22 PM
and a hobo man who had feet instead of hands
and hands instead of feet.

"Well, if it isn't my old friend Mr. McGregg...with a leg for an arm, and an arm for a leg!"
Title: Re: a poem
Post by: BizB on January 23, 2009, 02:31:55 PM
this poem is open to criticism and comments and other stuff... and I know it's kind of bad.
 But, I expect you'll all love it ardently of course  :w:
about the colors...um...yeah. I had fun with them.....
[snip]
I stopped reading when I saw that you used colors.  Bad form.  Bad form.
Title: Re: a poem
Post by: xolik on January 23, 2009, 04:03:06 PM
    Oh freddled gruntbuggly,
    Thy micturations are to me
    As plurdled gabbleblotchits
    On a lurgid bee
    That mordiously hath bitled out
    Its earted jurtles
    Into a rancid festering
    Now the jurpling slayjid agrocrustles
    Are slurping hagrilly up the axlegrurts
    And living glupules frart and slipulate
    Like jowling meated liverslime
    Groop, I implore thee, my foonting turlingdromes
    And hooptiously drangle me
    With crinkly bindlewurdles,
    Or else I shall rend thee in the gobberwarts with my blurglecruncheon
    See if I don't.
Title: Re: a poem
Post by: Wunderkind on January 23, 2009, 11:07:55 PM
    Oh freddled gruntbuggly,
    Thy micturations are to me
    As plurdled gabbleblotchits
    On a lurgid bee
    That mordiously hath bitled out
    Its earted jurtles
    Into a rancid festering
    Now the jurpling slayjid agrocrustles
    Are slurping hagrilly up the axlegrurts
*seizures*
    And living glupules frart and slipulate
    Like jowling meated liverslime
    Groop, I implore thee, my foonting turlingdromes
    And hooptiously drangle me
    With crinkly bindlewurdles,
    Or else I shall rend thee in the gobberwarts with my blurglecruncheon
    See if I don't.
*falls into coma*

*dies*
Title: Re: a poem
Post by: 12AX7 on January 24, 2009, 02:12:36 AM
Then you'll absolutely LOVE this:

 http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pRisDso99s0 (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pRisDso99s0)
Title: Re: a poem
Post by: 12AX7 on January 24, 2009, 02:45:32 AM
What are you babbling on about now?
Title: Re: a poem
Post by: warlack568 on July 04, 2009, 05:14:44 PM
i feel a little fight  :evil:
Title: Re: a poem
Post by: 12AX7 on July 05, 2009, 05:03:11 AM
   :-)  12 <3 BS 2!





  ...wanna wrestle some more?  :evil:

Title: Re: a poem
Post by: pbsaurus on July 08, 2009, 06:31:27 PM
Only if there's mud involved.

Harcourt!
Title: Re: a poem
Post by: Demosthenes on July 09, 2009, 03:02:08 PM
Harcourt!

Excellent reference!   8-)
Title: Re: a poem
Post by: pbsaurus on July 09, 2009, 08:40:31 PM
/me bows